英语帝来帮帮忙看看这段文字有没有错误!Don't know whyMy heart is achingPerhapsMy mind is addictedMy happiness and sadnessHad already been related to youWhat can I doIs to fall in loveIs to be in loveJust belive in myselfJust believe t

英语帝来帮帮忙看看这段文字有没有错误!Don't know whyMy heart is achingPerhapsMy mind is addictedMy happiness and sadnessHad already been related to youWhat can I doIs to fall in loveIs to be in loveJust belive in myselfJust believe t
英语帝来帮帮忙看看这段文字有没有错误!
Don't know why
My heart is aching
Perhaps
My mind is addicted
My happiness and sadness
Had already been related to you
What can I do
Is to fall in love
Is to be in love
Just belive in myself
Just believe this love
Let the soft breeze bring the doubts away
A piece of fallen leaves
Is whispering in my ears
Warm sunlight is kissing me on my cheek
I will like a sunflower
Toward to the bright sun
Yes
You are my sun
My sunshine
请帮忙看看有没有语法错误或者别的问题谢谢了
大家都很好，难以选择…现在要上学，星期天回来考虑考虑再决定

英语帝来帮帮忙看看这段文字有没有错误!Don't know whyMy heart is achingPerhapsMy mind is addictedMy happiness and sadnessHad already been related to youWhat can I doIs to fall in loveIs to be in loveJust belive in myselfJust believe t
我只能确定不是很地道的英文...有很多句子我都读得不是很流畅.
在美国读了这么多年书,这点还是知道的.
有一些语序很不对
例如especially I notice there still are massive incessant debates
notice应该是noticed,这是基本语法问题
there still are 应该是 there are still...语序问题
还有he always believe and obey
很基本的第三人称单数,语法错误,以英文为母语的人是不会犯这种低级语法错误的
文章还是很通顺的,所以应该至少到了大学水平把
你的串号我已经记下,采纳后我会帮你制作

严格而言，语法错误是有的，但是在诗歌里面，我觉得是可以理解的。。。。。而且会比较有韵味。

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这是你自己写的，吗？挺优美的。但是有些地方不是特别和谐。
1.Don't know why-------你的整篇诗歌几乎都有主语，所以第一句最好也加上主语：I don't know why
2.Just belive in myself
Just believe this love
-------believe和believe in 是有细微的区别的：
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这是你自己写的，吗？挺优美的。但是有些地方不是特别和谐。
1.Don't know why-------你的整篇诗歌几乎都有主语，所以第一句最好也加上主语：I don't know why
2.Just belive in myself
Just believe this love
-------believe和believe in 是有细微的区别的：
Believe表示“相信”、“信以为真”（to accept as true）之意，它是及物动词，其后直接跟宾语。
Believe in则表示“信仰”、“信任”（to have faith in somebody or something）之意。
所以Just believe this love--------最好改为Just believe in this love
3.A piece of fallen leaves-------改为A piece of fallen leave
就这些了，你自己参考参考啦！

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1. What can I do
应该是what I can do
2. I will like a sunflower
will 后要加be
3.Toward to the bright sun
toward 或者to，两者取一即可
除此之外还有一些主语什么的错误，可能因为是诗歌所以故意省略了吧，俺就不纠结了。