Above all，going abroad is my dream i wonder i will go on further study，so i have to study English Of course，it is aimportant subject for me。Then，taking about my ways of study English.I always speak English loudly so that more like foreigner

Above all，going abroad is my dream i wonder i will go on further study，so i have to study English Of course，it is aimportant subject for me。Then，taking about my ways of study English.I always speak English loudly so that more like foreigner
Above all，going abroad is my dream i wonder i will go on further study，so i have to study English Of course，it is aimportant subject for me。Then，taking about my ways of study English.I always speak English loudly so that more like foreigner（更像外国人）。Besides，i like listening English songs。And i would talk with some foreigners，but i not have foreigner friends（用了虚拟，当时在单项看到这样的结构）so i have talk with myself in English。
Frialy i want to suggest that school invites a foreigner teacher。Not only improve our grades，but also we are taught more knowledge about foreign country，And i
think schoo shoude add to more English subject

Above all，going abroad is my dream i wonder i will go on further study，so i have to study English Of course，it is aimportant subject for me。Then，taking about my ways of study English.I always speak English loudly so that more like foreigner
I have a dream that one day I can go abroad to further my study,so in must enhance my English ability.It's absolutely a important subject for me.Here I want to share with you my ways of learning English.I always speak English loudly so that I feel like a foreigner myself(更像外国人感觉说不通啊,我觉得像个外国人就好了).Besides.I often listen to English songs.And I catch every chance to talk to foreigners,but I don't have foreigner friends,
so I always talk with myself in English(感觉怪怪的.).
Finally,I want to raise a advise to our school to invite a foreign teacher.Not only can he/she improve our grades,but also taught us more knowledge and culture about foreign country.And I think our school should increase the course time of English.

我今年高三毕业，之前一直帮老师评分，希望对你有客观的评价
我不知道你是什么年级的，什么分制，不好评分。
先说一下结构。Above all是你文章的开头吗？ 通常应放在文章最后一段表示总结、概括。 在你文章中，可以删了它，更可以和下文的Besides,Finally连接。
还有，你的逗号怎么这么多？用法不对。
你的表达很中文：going abroad is my dr...

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我今年高三毕业，之前一直帮老师评分，希望对你有客观的评价
我不知道你是什么年级的，什么分制，不好评分。
先说一下结构。Above all是你文章的开头吗？ 通常应放在文章最后一段表示总结、概括。 在你文章中，可以删了它，更可以和下文的Besides,Finally连接。
还有，你的逗号怎么这么多？用法不对。
你的表达很中文：going abroad is my dream。你应该说 I dream of going abroad，其他地方也有很多相似的问题。
没学过的语法不要乱用！虚拟语气不是这样用的。你的but i not have foreigner friends 应该改成I don't have any foreign friends.这个不是虚拟语气。你英语老师吃点会教的了，别心急。
总之，语法有待提高！

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