帮我改下初中英语作文I don't want to grow upi'm 15 years old now,I look like other students ,so busy,I have too homework to do and don't have enough time to play with friends .one day ,I dream abrout my kid's timein a park,I play with my fri

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帮我改下初中英语作文I don't want to grow upi'm 15 years old now,I look like other students ,so busy,I have too homework to do and don't have enough time to play with friends .one day ,I dream abrout my kid's timein a park,I play with my fri
帮我改下初中英语作文
I don't want to grow up
i'm 15 years old now,I look like other students ,so busy,I have too homework to do
and don't have enough time to play with friends .
one day ,I dream abrout my kid's time
in a park,I play with my friends ,we all enjoy it
we haven't any homework ,and needn't study all day
later,I back home ,panrents don't to criticize me .and I hvae many time to enjoy the
lunch ,and i can watch cartoonsat home ,it's so funny .
evening ,i can go to bed after 10 o'clock
the next day ,i can get up at noon.and i can see sky ,ican see sea.
i go to amusement park ,i only need to pay for half-price ticket and even need't pay for any thing
so,i can enjoy any amusement park.it's so happy and fun
just now ,my alarm clock is ring ,oh ,it's just a dream .
next ,i have a quick breakfast ,it's 7 o'clock .I was always late for school,today.too
next,i go to teacher's office ,it's too bad .
then,i start to siwm at the sea of books ,i don't want to grow up
god ,please help me ,help me

帮我改下初中英语作文I don't want to grow upi'm 15 years old now,I look like other students ,so busy,I have too homework to do and don't have enough time to play with friends .one day ,I dream abrout my kid's timein a park,I play with my fri
第二行“,so busy,I have too homework to do and don't have enough time to play with friends ”我认为改为“I have too homework to doand don't have enough time to play with friends ,it's so busy."比较好.
第四行"one day"改为"today" "make a dream";“abrout”什么意思,你打错了吧!是”about"
第六行"haven't"改为“don't have","needn't study "改为"needn't to study"
第七行” later,I back home ”改为“at last,I go back home."
第八行”cartoonsat"没这个单词
第九行,"evening"改为"in the evening"
第十行“see the shy","sea the sea"
第十一行” need't pay "改为"needn't to pay"
十三行“is ringing"
从第四行到第十二行所有的"can"都去掉!

I don't want to grow up
i'm 15 years old now, I look like other students ,so busy,I have too much homework to do
and don't have enough time to play with friends .
one day , I dr...

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I don't want to grow up
i'm 15 years old now, I look like other students ,so busy,I have too much homework to do
and don't have enough time to play with friends .
one day , I dream about my kid's time
in a park, I play with my friends ,we all enjoy it
we don‘t have any homework ,and needn't study all day
later,I come back home , panrents don't criticize me .and I hvae many time to enjoy the
lunch ,and I can watch cartoonsat home ,it's so funny .
evening ,I can go to bed after 10 o'clock
the next day ,I can get up at noon.and I can see sky ,I can see sea......
I go to amusement park ,I only need to pay for half-price ticket and even need't pay for any thing
so,I can enjoy any amusement park. it's so happy and fun

just now ,my alarm clock is ring ,oh ,it's just a dream .
next ,I have a quick breakfast ,it's 7 o'clock .I am always late for school
next，I go to teacher's office ,it's too bad .
then, I start to siwm at the sea of books ,I don't want to grow up
my god ,please help me ,help me ！

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1、too homework to 此句错误，因为too…to的意思是“太……而不能……”与本意不符
2、对过去的描写全换成过去式
3,I back home 不是一个完整的句子，back不是谓语动词，应该说i went back home
4、panrents don't to criticize me 此句中去掉to且don't换成didn't
5、and i can watch cartoonsat home 句中cartoons 然后是sat at home
6、just now ,my alarm clock is ring 应该为“just now ,my alarm clock was ringing“
错误蛮多的特别是过去式自己注意改一下因为太多我没改哦

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Oh~Poor little gay~
But you have came to this world and if you still think you are busy,poor,and so on,you will never to be a man.
You can choose many way, but if you don't love this world,you...

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Oh~Poor little gay~
But you have came to this world and if you still think you are busy,poor,and so on,you will never to be a man.
You can choose many way, but if you don't love this world,you can't live in this world any more.
If you want to become to this kind of people:no love,no happy……you can said "go to teacher's office ,it's too bad .then, i start to siwm at the sea of books ,i don't want to grow up god ,please help me ,help me" any more.
And you will never to see the truth and truly love forever~
我同情你。+_,-

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