Today is Friday,I once again went to the ninth people's hospital to see dentist.指点语法错误我写的一小段日记,希望指点语法错误.大概意思是说我去第九人民医院看病的事情.Today is Friday,I once again went to the nin

Today is Friday,I once again went to the ninth people's hospital to see dentist.指点语法错误我写的一小段日记,希望指点语法错误.大概意思是说我去第九人民医院看病的事情.Today is Friday,I once again went to the nin
Today is Friday,I once again went to the ninth people's hospital to see dentist.指点语法错误
我写的一小段日记,希望指点语法错误.大概意思是说我去第九人民医院看病的事情.
Today is Friday,I once again went to the ninth people's hospital to see dentist.However the dental clinic has been full,I can't registration.I don't want to go home without any achivement ,so I registered the Laser Cosmetic Clinic to remove a stain on my face.
I am so nervous before my treatment.I am worried about the treatment of pain and treatment risk.The doctor seems takes liberties with the treatment and patient.Maybe because they remedy too much petient.
I need to wait two months to know the effect of the treatment.I hope it will have a good effect .

Today is Friday,I once again went to the ninth people's hospital to see dentist.指点语法错误我写的一小段日记,希望指点语法错误.大概意思是说我去第九人民医院看病的事情.Today is Friday,I once again went to the nin
Today is Friday; once again I went to The Ninth People's Hospital to see a dentist.However the dental clinic was booked full,I couldn't get an appointment.I didn't want to have a fruitless day ,so I registered the Laser Cosmetic Clinic to remove a mark on my face.I was nervous before the treatment.I was worried about if it hurts and if there could have any risk.The doctor seemed relaxed about the procedure and towards patients.It is maybe because he has seen many patients.I have to wait for two months before seeing the effect of this treatment.I am hoping for a good result.

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Today is Friday, I once again went to the ninth people's hospital to see dentist. However the dental clinic has been full, I can't registration. I don't want to go home without any achivement , so I...

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Today is Friday, I once again went to the ninth people's hospital to see dentist. However the dental clinic has been full, I can't registration. I don't want to go home without any achivement , so I registered the Laser Cosmetic Clinic to remove a stain on my face.

I am so nervous before my treatment. I am worried about the treatment of pain and treatment risk. The doctor seems takes liberties with the treatment and patient. Maybe because they remedy too much petient.

I need to wait two months to know the effect of the treatment. I hope it will have a good effect .

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Today was Friday, I made another trip to the ninth people's hospital to see an dentist, As a result of finding that the dental clinic has been congested with so many people, which made me unable to make an instantaneous registration for myself , however, I did not want to go home without any result .finally I made a registeration to the laser cosmetic clinic to have some stain on my face removed /eliminated.

I felt so nervous before my treatment began , I also felt so anxious about the pain and risk that resulted from the treatment to be performed . The doctor seemed to exhibit much patience and proficiency in my treatment ,which was because that they had remedied a lot of such patients as me .

The final result /effect upon my treatment will be known in two months .I do hope that this effect upon my treat is tremendously satisfactory


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Today was Friday. I made one more trip to the ninth people's hospital with the purpose of seeing an dentist . To my great amazement , The dental clinic has been so crowed with many people / There has been a lot of people waiting in line for being examined , which made it a great failure for me to get my immediate registration to be examined .whereas .I would not like to come here without anything to be fulfilled . finally I have made up my mind to make a registration to the laser comestic clinic to have some stain on my face eliminated

Prior to the beginning of my treatment, I felt so nervous all over /with my heart . Many anxieties has come to me about the pain and risk caused by the treatment . The doctor seemed to be so sure of the treatment by exhibiting much patience and proficiency ,which was possibly because they had cured many people before

The eventual effect won't come out until two months later .I do hope that the effect is really exceedingly desirable and pleasing

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