本人写了一篇英语作文,因为语法和词组不熟悉,希望高手能帮忙修改修改,As the summer vacation/holiday is approaching,some college organization will organize a summer camp and is now recruiting .This summer camp will focus on

本人写了一篇英语作文,因为语法和词组不熟悉,希望高手能帮忙修改修改,As the summer vacation/holiday is approaching,some college organization will organize a summer camp and is now recruiting .This summer camp will focus on
本人写了一篇英语作文,因为语法和词组不熟悉,希望高手能帮忙修改修改,
As the summer vacation/holiday is approaching,some college organization will organize a summer camp and is now recruiting .
This summer camp will focus on improving student's mental and physical fitness.On the one hand it aims to instill confidence,independence and optimism into student;on the other hand,it will train students' body and make them stronger.Throught participating int the activity,student can gain a lot of usefull things.
This kind of activity gathered students from different grades to communicate and exchange their ideas.This would improve the technique and ability of social intercourse.In addition,
cooperation is required when students faced whih big problem that could not be solved by one man.thus,team spirit improved.
We need 30 college student who are warm-hearted and good at English.College students that meet the requirements and want to take part int the activity please call us at 85264256 or email us at vol@126.com
其中有一个 词组不知道用没用对,一方面——另一方面.还有有些地方该不该加ed,总之帮忙检查下各种错误

本人写了一篇英语作文,因为语法和词组不熟悉,希望高手能帮忙修改修改,As the summer vacation/holiday is approaching,some college organization will organize a summer camp and is now recruiting .This summer camp will focus on
1,college organization will organize a summer camp and is now recruiting .这句请检查单复数是否一致,还有这个recruit这个用在这里是什么意思?招聘?还是招募?用enlist是否会好点.这句话不怎么符合英语讲话习惯.最好是用is preparing .
2,instill confidence,independence and optimism into student,应该用IN,不用INTO
一方面.另一方面是：on one and .on the other hand.
3,Throught,写错了,应该是Through
4,This kind of activity gathered students from different grades to communicate and exchange their ideas用回gathers吧.
5,cooperation is required when students faced with big problem that could not be solved by one man.从语法角度讲,THAT 改为which吧,就没问题了,但是还是很生硬,不如把one man 改为oneself回好点.
6,We need 30 college student who are warm-hearted and good at English.30个人还不用复数?
是写外语系招募此还是真的仅仅只是一个作文?
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Summer is coming, some university organization summer camp and will arrange "recruiting.
This summer camp will focus on improving students' physical and mental health on one hand, it aims to give ...

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Summer is coming, some university organization summer camp and will arrange "recruiting.
This summer camp will focus on improving students' physical and mental health on one hand, it aims to give confidence, independent of the students and optimistic, On the other hand, it will cultivate students' body and make them more strong through participating in intellectual activities, students can obtain many useful things.
This activity students collect different grades

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