求助,修改英语语病~急求!With the rapid social development, life and working rhythm also more and more quickly, the car has become the main means of transportation, it brings us a unprecedented convenience,In all exclamation social progress a

求助,修改英语语病~急求!With the rapid social development, life and working rhythm also more and more quickly, the car has become the main means of transportation, it brings us a unprecedented convenience,In all exclamation social progress a
求助,修改英语语病~急求!
With the rapid social development, life and working rhythm also more and more quickly, the car has become the main means of transportation, it brings us a unprecedented convenience,
In all exclamation social progress and enjoy social progress at the same time, it also brings us a disaster, one of the fresh life disappear in a driving wheel, a happy family in a broken.
Someone once said traffic accident as "modern social traffic war", the traffic accident like a invisible killer, lurking in the road waiting for illegal illegal person appear.
Therefore, people should learn to protect themselves, to develop civilization, civilization driving the way of walking. The tragedy of the blood tell we must obey the traffic rules, accomplish truly "care for life, safety travel".
On nov 16, 2011 in the morning, a traffic accident happened in gansu province.
According to introducing, the accident school bus nuclear load 9 people, real load 64 people.
According to reporter understanding, the victims of the 19 people, there are 17 is kindergarten children, a teacher and a company by personnel.
In addition to 13 children badly hurt, and child minor injuries
The two above is China's major and a representative of the traffic accident.
Our country traffic accident death toll remains high, there are many reasons.
The picture on the left is summarized the main cause of road accidents
2011 July 23 night, hap
pen lukewarm line jumbo moving cars piled up after the accident, the car four carriages from the viaduct fall off.
The accident resulted in forty people were killed and 200 people were injured.
In the traffic regulations maintenance, we all have security, let us obey the traffic rules.
Cherish life, away from the traffic accident, please obey the traffic rules.
Thank you for you listens

求助,修改英语语病~急求!With the rapid social development, life and working rhythm also more and more quickly, the car has become the main means of transportation, it brings us a unprecedented convenience,In all exclamation social progress a
With the rapid social development,more and more quickl life and working rhythm,the car has become the main means of transportation and it brings us an unprecedented convenience,
In all exclamation social progress and enjoying social progress at the same time,it also brings us a disaster,one of the fresh life disappearing in a driving wheel,a happy family in a broken.
Someone once said traffic accident as "modern social traffic war",the traffic accident likes a invisible killer,lurking in the road waiting for illegal illegal person appear.
Therefore,people should learn to protect themselves and to develop civilization,civilization driving the way of walking.The tragedy of the blood tells me that we must obey the traffic rules and accomplish truly "care for life,safety travel".
On nov 16th,2011 in the morning,a traffic accident happened in gansu province.
According to introducing,the accident school bus nuclear should have loaded 9 people but really loaded 64 people.
According to reporter understanding,the victims of the 19 people,there are 17 who are kindergarten children,a teacher and a company by personnel.
In addition to 13 children badly hurted,and child minor injuries
The two above are China's major representatives of the traffic accident.
Our country's traffic accident death toll remains high,there are many reasons.
The picture on the left has summarized the main cause of road accidents
2011 July 23 night,hap
pen lukewarm line jumbo moving cars piled up after the accident,the car four carriages from the viaduct fall off.
The accident resulted in forty people killed and 200 people injured.
In the traffic regulations maintenance,we all have security and let us obey the traffic rules.
to Cherish life and to be away from the traffic accident,please obey the traffic rules.
Thank you for you listens
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“life and working rhythm also more and more quickly” ：also后加be
“the car has become the main means of transportation, it brings us a unprecedented convenience,"改为：“the car has become the main part of transportation, which brings us a lot unprecedented convenience,"