初中英语作文 大家帮我检查一下拼写错误和语法错误如题,这是演讲用的 my hobby 忽略标点和大小写,只看拼写和语法（比如时态和单复数）,如果有更好的（在写作上的）建议当然更好了,要显

初中英语作文 大家帮我检查一下拼写错误和语法错误如题,这是演讲用的 my hobby 忽略标点和大小写,只看拼写和语法（比如时态和单复数）,如果有更好的（在写作上的）建议当然更好了,要显
初中英语作文 大家帮我检查一下拼写错误和语法错误
如题,这是演讲用的 my hobby 忽略标点和大小写,只看拼写和语法（比如时态和单复数）,如果有更好的（在写作上的）建议当然更好了,要显得正式一些 主要检查语法错误 力求通顺简洁
everyone has hobbies ,no matter whether you are rich or not,no matter how old you are.a good hobby can help us learn a lot of knowledge,even change our lives.i have many hobbies,such as listening to pop music or reading magazines.but my favorite hobby is watching movies.
i started to watch movies few years ago.my sister enjoyed watching movies very much at that moment,so she taught me to download free movies from the internet,and she introduced many excellent movies to me,such as《The Shawshank Redemption》and《High School Musical》.i enjoyed them very much.now,i have watched many movies,and it‘s free,i don’t have to pay much for them,my parents bought me a large video player so that i can watch movies everywhere,and i‘m falling in love with movies.
i love watching movies but not just for relaxing.it helps me a lot.some show me customs and culture in other countries ,and others tell me to face to the difficulties and to be brave.some english movies can develop my vocabulary and pronunciation.i can learn some new words from movies.sometimes i try to speak english as if' i‘m a character in movies.day by day ,i can speak english better than before and i have known many new words.
my favourite movie is 《Inception》.the actors are very handsome and they acted well in the movie and the movie tells a story about someone came into one‘s dream ,it is very exciting.
i really enjoy watching movies,but now,it is more and more difficult for me to watch a movie.the first reason is my school work,i'm very busy now.next,there are fewer and fewer free movies for us to download.it means i must pay much more for my hobby

初中英语作文 大家帮我检查一下拼写错误和语法错误如题,这是演讲用的 my hobby 忽略标点和大小写,只看拼写和语法（比如时态和单复数）,如果有更好的（在写作上的）建议当然更好了,要显
1、such as listening to pop music or reading magazines.中的or是否应该改成and或者“、”?
2、and it‘s free,改成“of course it‘s free ”是否会更轻松些?
3、some show me customs and culture in other countries ,and others tell me to face to the difficulties and to be brave.改为
Showing me customs and culture in other countries ,telling me to face to the difficulties and to be brave,and so on,all that things it can give me.会不会更口语化些?
4、i can learn some new words from movies.中的 movies可改为them 以避免重复.
5、 i have known many new words中的 known 改为got或者recognized会更好些.
以上一些,可供参考.

The article is pretty good. However if you will do a prensitation, you need to consider copyright proection of a movie.Is it illegal to download some moive for free?
BTW, you mentioned " now，i ha...

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The article is pretty good. However if you will do a prensitation, you need to consider copyright proection of a movie.Is it illegal to download some moive for free?
BTW, you mentioned " now，i have watched many movies，and it‘s free". If you want to use "now" I think you need to say " I watch". Otherwise, you'd better change "now" to "till now".

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自己想啊

第一句话最好把WHEATHER去了。第二句话改成CHANGES。第二段有个FACE TO 改成FACE。可能有其他没看到的哈。用手机看太费劲了…

啊啊 啊啊！！~~ 我的妈啊！！！~~ （头晕、、、、）
你还是自己改吧 、、、
我英语差、、、、、

写的蛮好的