有什么语法错误什么的,或者换一些高级句型Good afternoon,everyone.Today,I would like to introduce a new friend from Zhongshan.His name is LiHua.He was born in August 1996.He is a Senior1 student in Zhong Shan No.1 Middle school.LiHua

有什么语法错误什么的,或者换一些高级句型Good afternoon,everyone.Today,I would like to introduce a new friend from Zhongshan.His name is LiHua.He was born in August 1996.He is a Senior1 student in Zhong Shan No.1 Middle school.LiHua
有什么语法错误什么的,或者换一些高级句型
Good afternoon,everyone.Today,I would like to introduce a new friend from Zhongshan.His name is LiHua.He was born in August 1996.He is a Senior1 student in Zhong Shan No.1 Middle school.LiHua is incredibly hard-working,so he did well in computer,Chinese,math,English and PE.He likes swimming best and he thinks swimming is interesting.His hobby is writing poetries.He won the first prise in the school poetry competition.He wants to find a pen pal whose hobby is writing poetry.Anyone who is interested in this,please call at 8883301.
前两句和最后一句是英语报纸的原题目给出的开头结尾，这个嘛算比较权威吧。

有什么语法错误什么的,或者换一些高级句型Good afternoon,everyone.Today,I would like to introduce a new friend from Zhongshan.His name is LiHua.He was born in August 1996.He is a Senior1 student in Zhong Shan No.1 Middle school.LiHua
Good afternoon,everyone.Today,I would like to introduce a new friend from Zhongshan.His name is Li Hua.He was born in August 1996.He is a Senior 1 student in Zhongshan No.1 Middle School.Li Hua is incredibly hard-working,so he does well in computer,Chinese,math,English and PE.He loves sports,he can swim very well and he thinks swimming is interesting.He can write beautiful poems and he has ever won the first prize in the school poetry competition.He wants to find a pen pal whose hobby is writing poems.Anyone who is interested in this,please call at 8883301.
帮你用心改了一下.写作要注意细节,一些小错误可以成为致命伤.

在introduce后加个you 第三行did改为does 在won前加hasintroduce那个英语报纸上就是这样的也可以那样 如果你是英语初学者 要把里面出现的一些词组尽量掌握 introduce somebody something 当然 如果你的英语达到一定水平 这些是可以省略的- -高一，那个won我问我同桌，他说直接用过去式，为什么用现在完成时呢完成式的用法...

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呃 语法错误好多啊 for example （举个例子）只是范文 改大写的我就不大写了 没时间 仅供参考 Hello，everyone . goodafteron. Today, I would like to introduce a new friend from Zhongshan.His name is LiHua。His birthday is 1996 August（注意这你写错...

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呃 语法错误好多啊 for example （举个例子）只是范文 改大写的我就不大写了 没时间 仅供参考 Hello，everyone . goodafteron. Today, I would like to introduce a new friend from Zhongshan.His name is LiHua。His birthday is 1996 August（注意这你写错了）He is a student of the Zhongshan（这也错了）Li Hua is very diligent（这 。。）So his computer、 Chinese、 math 、English and good at sports.
He likes swimming and think swimming is very interesting..His hobby is writing poetries.He was awarded the first school poetry contest.He wants to find a pen pal whose hobby is writing poetry.Anyone who is interested in this, please call at 8883301

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