神七科技展的英语作文,要交的,请帮我修改一下!全文如下:Recently,I luckily got the admission tickets of " 2008 Shanghai Aerospace Techology Exhibition".So I have the chance to close encounter with the shenzhou -7 spacecraft.In a s

神七科技展的英语作文,要交的,请帮我修改一下!全文如下:Recently,I luckily got the admission tickets of " 2008 Shanghai Aerospace Techology Exhibition".So I have the chance to close encounter with the shenzhou -7 spacecraft.In a s
神七科技展的英语作文,要交的,请帮我修改一下!
全文如下:
Recently,I luckily got the admission tickets of " 2008 Shanghai Aerospace Techology Exhibition".So I have the chance to close encounter with the shenzhou -7 spacecraft.
In a spherical exhibition hall on the 1st floor,the most attractive objects are the three component parts of shenzhou-7 spacecraft：orbital module,re-entry moduleand propelling module.The spacecraft blasted off to the space carried by the Long-March II-F carrier rocket,propelling module provide the spaceship with power and fuel.Orbital module is the place where astronauts lived and did researches,it takes on the responsible of keeping on orbital motion after separeting from re-entry module.When the spacecraft prepared for returning back to Earth’s atmosphere,it gave up orbital module,and finally landed safely by re-entry module.
This exhibition showed not only the secret of shenzhou-7 spaceflight but also the contribution of aerospace technology giving us.A huge pumpkin,more than 200 catty,also displayed in this exhibition.We call it outspace pumpkin.Its bright color attract many childs to gather around it and took photos.LED Cold light source,compressed food and the techology of image-stablization,etc.With the development of aerospace techology,these outspace products began to enter our families and enrich our daily life.
It seemed such a short time of spaceflight from TV,but actually it hide a big project behind,which integrating lots of up-to-date techology of wide fields ranged from electric,IT techology,biology science and hygiene area,ocean shipping,etc.All of them constituted the final success of this spaceflight.
When I fogot myself in memorize the scence of Yury Gagarin,the first spaceman landing on moon,a big blueprint of our manned space program opened out in front of my eyes:The first step is establishment of our areospace system;Secondly,we will have our own astronauts getting out of aircraft capsule; Thirdly,we will establish a outspace station for long research.We had walked in the second period,I think it isn't far way from landing on Moon!

神七科技展的英语作文,要交的,请帮我修改一下!全文如下:Recently,I luckily got the admission tickets of " 2008 Shanghai Aerospace Techology Exhibition".So I have the chance to close encounter with the shenzhou -7 spacecraft.In a s
Recently,I have luckily got the admission tickets of " 2008 Shanghai Aerospace Techology Exhibition"".So I had the chance to close with the shenzhou -7 spacecraft.In a spherical exhibition hall on the 1st floor,the most attractive objects are the three component parts of shenzhou-7 spacecraft：orbital module,re-entry moduleand propelling module.The spacecraft blasted off to the space carried by the Long-March II-F carrier rocketp.Propelling module provided the spaceship with power and fuel.Orbital module was the place where astronauts lived and did researches,it took on the responsiblity of keeping on orbital motion after separeting from re-entry module.When the spacecraft prepared for returning to Earth’s atmosphere,it gave up orbital module,and finally landed safely by re-entry module.
This exhibition showed not only the secret of shenzhou-7 spaceflight but also the contribution of aerospace technology .A huge pumpkin,more than 200 catty,also displayed in this exhibition.We called it outer space pumpkin.Its bright color attracted many children to gather around it and took photos.LED Cold light source,compressed food and the techology of image-stablization,etc.With the development of aerospace techology,these outer space products began to enter our families and enrich our daily life.
It seemed a short time of spaceflight from TV,but actually it hid a big project ,which integrated lots of up-to-date techology of wide fields ranging from electronics,IT ,biological science and hygiene area,ocean shipping,etc.All of them constituted the final success of this spaceflight.
When I lost myself in memorizing the scene of Yury Gagarin,the first spaceman landing on the moon,a big blueprint of our manned space program appeared in front of my eyes:The first step is to establish our areospace system;Secondly,we will have our own astronauts getting out of aircraft capsule; Thirdly,we will establish a outer space station for further research.We have walked in the second period,I think it isn't far from landing on the Moon!

Recently,I luckily got the admission tickets of " 2008 Shanghai Aerospace Techology Exhibition".So I have the chance to close encounter with the shenzhou -7 spacecraft. 不用在句首用so
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Recently,I luckily got the admission tickets of " 2008 Shanghai Aerospace Techology Exhibition".So I have the chance to close encounter with the shenzhou -7 spacecraft. 不用在句首用so
In a spherical exhibition hall on the 1st floor,the most attractive objects are the three component parts of shenzhou-7 spacecraft：orbital module，re-entry moduleand propelling module。为什么只有两个module? The spacecraft blasted off to the space carried by the Long-March II-F carrier rocket，propelling module provide the spaceship with power and fuel.一句话里不可以用两个谓语动词,这里出现了blasted 和 provide,而且时态还不一致. Orbital module is the place where astronauts lived and did researches,it takes on the responsible of keeping on orbital motion after separeting from re-entry module. 这句话也有两个动词,如果有两个动词出现,记得要有连词. When the spacecraft prepared for returning back to Earth’s atmosphere,it gave up orbital module,and finally landed safely by re-entry module.
文章很长,只改一段吧. 根据英语的写作习惯,每段都要有主题句,而且建议英语为第二语言的作者,把主题句放在句首.看了你的第一段,我不是很清楚你想表达的内容是什么.其次,很多句子出现了双谓语动词,中间却没有连词连接. 文章的时态不一致. 文章如果交给中国老师的话,用词用句可以不苛求地道,但是语法正确很重要.如果老师是外国人~~~就要慢慢改了.

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