作业帮求助帮忙批改一篇英语作文I am very cold in that big wind.I am a chinese girl,i go to there to protect wild animals.They are so beatiuful and precious ,but so many people hurt the for their fur.I can not watch them be killed.so i come here
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求助帮忙批改一篇英语作文I am very cold in that big wind.I am a chinese girl,i go to there to protect wild animals.They are so beatiuful and precious ,but so many people hurt the for their fur.I can not watch them be killed.so i come here
求助帮忙批改一篇英语作文
I am very cold in that big wind.I am a chinese girl,i go to there to protect wild animals.They are so beatiuful and precious ,but so many people hurt the for their fur.I can not watch them be killed.so i come here .Maybe i am very small,however,i want to help them.They are so valueness .I think we should take care of them .I hope more and more people will realize it is so important to protect wild animals.We can set up the nature Reserves for them and the goverment should take actions .
求助帮忙批改一篇英语作文I am very cold in that big wind.I am a chinese girl,i go to there to protect wild animals.They are so beatiuful and precious ,but so many people hurt the for their fur.I can not watch them be killed.so i come here
第一行,went there
第二行,watch them to be killed
第三行,so I came here; 后面动词都改成过去式
初一或者初二的水平吧,除时态外还算可以.
big wind ----->strong wind
重写吧。这是中文直译的。
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我想知道为什么你要用现在时？这不应该用过去时么？？！（一般过去时：人was/were.. 人Verb.过去式）
还有，素材不太好，怎么可能你看到某某人杀掉动物呢？应该写的真实一些，而且描写不充分，对心理的描写应该充实一些。这个和语文作文是一样的，一篇文章必须要有亮点。
嗯，建议你可以写的素材（如果是关于保护动物和自然的）：1、以小见大。比如说看见邻居如...
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句酷批改网..
我想知道为什么你要用现在时？这不应该用过去时么？？！（一般过去时：人was/were.. 人Verb.过去式）
还有，素材不太好，怎么可能你看到某某人杀掉动物呢？应该写的真实一些，而且描写不充分，对心理的描写应该充实一些。这个和语文作文是一样的，一篇文章必须要有亮点。
嗯，建议你可以写的素材（如果是关于保护动物和自然的）：1、以小见大。比如说看见邻居如何对待宠物；2、读后感或观后感。比较直接的方式，比如说《海洋》什么什么的。
IN A WORD，你应该重新写，这篇文章第一位的素材就没有掌握好。
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