达人进,看能不能帮我改改,一篇英语作文句子总是那么别扭,或者词的用法有错误吧.1 As we all know,smoking is not only harmful to the smokers,but also to non-smokers around them.But the problem is why there are still so man

达人进,看能不能帮我改改,一篇英语作文句子总是那么别扭,或者词的用法有错误吧.1 As we all know,smoking is not only harmful to the smokers,but also to non-smokers around them.But the problem is why there are still so man
达人进,看能不能帮我改改,一篇英语作文
句子总是那么别扭,或者词的用法有错误吧.
1 As we all know,smoking is not only harmful to the smokers,but also to non-smokers around them.But the problem is why there are still so many smokers?In my opinion,several reasons listed below can account it.When some smokers were young,they saw their parents smoking.Curious about it,they began to imitate them.Then,they found it just so-so,but it is very difficult to quit it.Other minors think that smoking is a kind of fashion,standing on the street while smoking is as cool as a punk.There are also quite a lot of literators or artists who usually need full spirits to create new works at midnight.Tobacco maybe is the best way can help them.Besides,workers’ lying off their stress and social intercourse are also included in the main reasons.
2 You can always tell an addict from the stale smell of tobacco clinging to his or her clothes.However,here are many stronger reasons why people should not smoke.First,smoking can lead to many serious diseases such as heart attack,hypertension and lung cancer,which are difficult to treat.Second,the bad habit not only does harm to the smokers themselves but also endangers people around them.Third,the smelly fume also impacts on the public environment.In addition,tobaccos spending cause smokers’ wasting on money.
3 In my opinion,the government has responsibility to help addicts quit smoking.They should publicize more knowledge about the harm of smoking to citizens while decreeing new bans to limit public smoking.And then,drugs such as nicotine patches and Zyban can help smokers get rid of smoking.Besides,smokers are still going to need lots of willpower and self-continence to keep trying.

达人进,看能不能帮我改改,一篇英语作文句子总是那么别扭,或者词的用法有错误吧.1 As we all know,smoking is not only harmful to the smokers,but also to non-smokers around them.But the problem is why there are still so man
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1 As we all know,smoking is not only harmful to the smokers,but also to non-smokers around them.However,the problem is why there are still so many smokers?In my opinion,several reasons listed below can explain it.Some smokers saw their parents smoking when they were young and started to imitate them out of curiosity.When they found it just so-so,they had been addicted and became too difficult to quit smoking.Other minors think that smoking is a kind of fashion,standing on the street smoking is as cool as a punk.There are also quite a number of writers or artists who usually need full attention to create new works at midnight.Tobacco may be the best way to help them concentrate.Besides,workers who want to release their stress and social meetings are also included in the main reasons.
2 You can always tell an addict from the stale smell of tobacco clinging to his or her clothes.However,here are many stronger reasons why people should not smoke.First,smoking can lead to many serious diseases such as heart attack,hypertension and lung cancer,which are at best difficult to treat and at worst lethal.Second,the bad habit not only does harm to the smokers themselves but also endangers people around them.Third,the smelly fume also pollutes the public environment.In addition,tobaccos spending cause smokers wasting money on the habit.
3 In my opinion,the government has responsibility to help addicts quit smoking.They should publicize more knowledge about the harmfulness of smoking and decree new bans to limit public smoking.And then,drugs such as nicotine patches and Zyban can help smokers get rid of smoking.
Certainly,besides external help,smokers are still going to need lots of willpower and self-discipline to keep trying.
英文方面水平仅限于此了,错处还请包涵.但是关于结构我想说两句,就是整篇文章看起来头重脚轻了点.如果可以修改下开头,把第一个段落变成开篇的总纲领,介绍整篇文章会涉及的内容,然后把吸烟的原因单独分成另外一个段落,应该会显得更好吧.当然,水平所限,仅供参考.

1 As we all know, smoking is not only harmful to the smokers, but also to non-smokers (who are) around them. But the problem is why there are still so many smokers? In my opinion, several reasons list...

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1 As we all know, smoking is not only harmful to the smokers, but also to non-smokers (who are) around them. But the problem is why there are still so many smokers? In my opinion, several reasons listed below can account (explain) it. When some smokers were young, they saw their parents smoking. Curious about it(Curiously), they began to imitate them. Then, they found it just so-so, but it is very difficult to quit it.(But it's easy to get addiction) Other minors think that smoking is a kind of fashion, standing on the street while smoking is as cool as a punk. There are also quite a lot of literators or artists who usually need full spirits to create new works at midnight. Tobacco maybe is the best way can help them. Besides, workers’ lying off their stress and social intercourse are also included in the main reasons.
2 You can always tell an addict from the stale smell of tobacco clinging to his or her clothes. However, here are many stronger reasons why people should not smoke. First, smoking can lead to many serious diseases such as heart attack, hypertension and lung cancer, which are difficult to treat. Second, the bad habit not only does harm to the smokers themselves but also endangers people around them. Third, the smelly fume also impacts on the public environment. In addition, tobaccos spending cause smokers’ wasting on money.
3 In my opinion, the government has responsibility to help addicts quit smoking. They should publicize more knowledge(informations) about the harm of smoking to citizens while decreeing new bans to limit public smoking. And then, drugs such as nicotine patches and Zyban can help smokers get rid of smoking. Besides, smokers are still going to need lots of willpower and self-continence to keep trying.
写的满好大
打括号的表可以添加或修改的 基本上很不错

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有些意思不好表达的句子最好不用。我的更正如下：
As we all know, smoking is not only harmful to the smokers, but also harmful to non-smokers around them. However, the problem is why there are still so many smokers? In my ...

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有些意思不好表达的句子最好不用。我的更正如下：
As we all know, smoking is not only harmful to the smokers, but also harmful to non-smokers around them. However, the problem is why there are still so many smokers? In my opinion, several reasons listed below can explain it. When some smokers were young, they saw others smoking. They felt curious about it and began to imitate them. Then, they found it just so-so, but it is very difficult to give up smoking. Some youngsters think that smoking is a kind of fashion. Standing on the street while smoking is as cool as a punk. There are also quite a lot of literators and artists who always need full spirits to create new works in midnight. Tobacco maybe is the best way that can help them. Besides, laid off workers usually smoke to reduce anxiety. In social intercourse, people like to give each other a cigarette. These are all the cogent reasons of such a phenomena.
2 .We had better give up smoking, because it is bad for our health. Firstly, smoking can lead to many serious diseases such as heart attack, hypertension and lung cancer, which are difficult to be cured. Secondly, the bad habit not only does harm to the smokers themselves but also endangers people around them. Thirdly, the smelly fume also influence the public environment. Finally, money spent on tobaccos smoking is a big waste.
3 In my opinion, the government has responsibilities in helping addicts to give up smoking. They should publicize more knowledge about the harm of smoking to citizens and decree new laws to limit public smoking. And then, drugs such as nicotine patches and Zyban can help smokers get rid of smoking.

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1 As we all know, smoking is not only harmful to the smokers,(去掉逗号，因为not only与but also本来是一个句子里的，意思更连贯） but also to non-smokers around them. But the problem is why there are still so many smokers? In m...

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1 As we all know, smoking is not only harmful to the smokers,(去掉逗号，因为not only与but also本来是一个句子里的，意思更连贯） but also to non-smokers around them. But the problem is why there are still so many smokers? In my opinion, several reasons listed below can account it. When some smokers were young, they saw their parents smoking. （加上being）Curious about it, they began to imitate them. Then, they found it （加上was或者去掉前面的they）just so-so, but it is（不知道改成has been是不是更好，表示已经很难怎么怎么了） very difficult to quit it. Other minors（改成the minorities，少数人。可以去掉other） think that smoking is a kind of fashion, standing on the street while（改为and就行） smoking is as cool as a punk. There are also quite a lot of literators or artists who usually need full spirits to create new works at midnight. Tobacco maybe is the best way can help them（。。。is the best way in which they can be helped). Besides, workers’ lying off their stress and social intercourse are also included in the main reasons.
2 You can always tell an addict from the stale smell of tobacco clinging to his or her clothes. However, here are many stronger reasons why people should not smoke. First, smoking can lead to many serious diseases such as heart attack, hypertension and lung cancer, which are difficult to treat( 不知道是不是应该改为be treated）. Second, the bad habit not only does harm to the smokers themselves but also endangers people around them. Third, the smelly fume also impacts on the public environment. In addition, tobaccos spending（消费吗？改为consumption似乎更好） cause smokers’ wasting on （改为of）money.
3 In my opinion, the government has responsibility to help addicts quit smoking. They should publicize more knowledge about the harm of smoking to citizens while decreeing new bans to limit public smoking. And then, drugs such as nicotine patches and Zyban can help smokers get rid of smoking. Besides, smokers still need lots of willpower and self-continence to keep trying.
呵呵。班门弄斧了，别笑话~
有些单词我不是太认识
逻辑不错，吸烟是心血管疾病的独立危险因子，没有高血压之类的诱因也可以引发各种心血管疾病。被动吸烟比主动吸烟危害更大，尤其是对孕妇和胎儿。
那些改过的地方你自己再看看，如果不改更好就别改了。

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