假如你住在市中心,最近搬来两位新邻居,请你写出对两位邻居的看法.内容提示：1.女邻居叫Mary.一位办公人员,大约35岁,乘公交车上班,为人友善;2.男邻居Tom.一名年轻工人;晚上很迟睡觉,常把钢

假如你住在市中心,最近搬来两位新邻居,请你写出对两位邻居的看法.内容提示：1.女邻居叫Mary.一位办公人员,大约35岁,乘公交车上班,为人友善;2.男邻居Tom.一名年轻工人;晚上很迟睡觉,常把钢
假如你住在市中心,最近搬来两位新邻居,请你写出对两位邻居的看法.
内容提示：1.女邻居叫Mary.一位办公人员,大约35岁,乘公交车上班,为人友善;2.男邻居Tom.一名年轻工人;晚上很迟睡觉,常把钢琴弹的很大声;3.你无法睡好觉,你和Mary与Tom交涉.作文的内容,100个单词左右

假如你住在市中心,最近搬来两位新邻居,请你写出对两位邻居的看法.内容提示：1.女邻居叫Mary.一位办公人员,大约35岁,乘公交车上班,为人友善;2.男邻居Tom.一名年轻工人;晚上很迟睡觉,常把钢
Living in the center of the city means I get to meet lots of different people.For example,my two new neighbors have quite divergent personalities.Mary,a 35-year-old lady who takes the bus to work every day,is quite friendly and well-mannered.I have had many pleasant encounters with her.Tom,on the other hand,is a young construction worker who often stays up late and plays the piano loudly enough to disrupt my own sleep.I mentioned this to Mary,who suffered equally,but she was too nice to interfere.I,on the other hand,plan to speak to Tom about the social good.
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重述了你的内容,然后说喜欢Mary而希望Tom改善他的习惯,然而Mary人太善良,不愿意帮你说服他,所以你决定自己去说.
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顺便提一下,楼上某些用词有些小问题.比如：
“worker”其实不是工人的意思,工人必须是construction worker或factory worker等等,不然就是“工作者”的意思而已.工作者可不代表工人...无奈只能选一个,反正是虚构的情景.想想construction worker是工人,符合楼主所说,然而可不是任何worker都是工人呢.worker跟employee是差不多的.比如说You're a good worker的意思只不过是“你干的不错.”
“young comer”这个说法不存在,一般只能说newcomer.这是其次,重点是comer这个说法本身就不存在.
“guys“是指男人的,包括了女士就不能用了,无论单数或复数.虽然的确有人用复数包括女人,但毕竟不正确,而且不适合写下来.当然,如此口语化的词本身就不能在作文中写.
used to是过去式,代表Mary曾经有那习惯但现在不了.
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补充一些...
前面我指出的那些也并非全部,下面做个比较精细的纠正：
Living in city center makes me already get into the lifestyle of living （living...lifestyle...living...似乎把life这个词用的太多太快了）with noise,（这里是comma splice,逗号应当改成句号）however,some small changes have been made （have been made是说被某人主动做的改变,而不是因某事而发生的改变；原意应当是后者,所以该说some small changes happened.而且,既然你刚说习惯吵闹,又立刻说改变,那么意思就必须是吵闹度改了,但是实际上又没改变,所以这句话整体不通）when two new comers （newcomers是一个词）joined in （joined in 是参与了,这里该说joined,没有in,才是加入的意思 ）our community,and （加了逗号和and又只有主语没有动词?不对吧）exactly,（完全不对的说法,你是想说完全不同么?exactly不是这样用的,这里应该说completely之类的词）two different guys（已经说过的问题）.One female neighbour named Mary is an （thirty-five不是元音开头的,是a而不是an）35-year old office lady,and she is really a nice person and used to （说过的问题）go to work by bus.Another young comer （说过的问题） is Tom whose job （whose job前面要加逗号,你不了解这背后的语法可以问我） is a worker（说过的问题）,and he likes staying up late and playing piano really loudly.Given that I could not sleep well,I decide to discuss this matter with both of them and（这个and前面反而必须加逗号） I hope we can work it out soon.
在美国很多小学,每天英文课都要给句子改错,久之就练出了这种习惯.
当然我这样的习惯也是有好处的.我在美国高考SAT的语法部分得到了满分.
我中文很差,语气中若有得罪还请见谅.

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Living in city center makes me already get into the lifestyle of living with noise, however, some small changes have been made when two new comers joined in our community, and exactly，two different guys. One female neighbour named Mary is an 35-year old office lady, and she is really a nice person and used to go to work by bus. Another young comer is Tom whose job is a worker, and he likes staying up late and playing piano really loudly. Given that I could not sleep well, I decide to discuss this matter with both of them and I hope we can work it out soon.
你看下ok嘛？
补充一下，关于另一位同学的批示，我也想讲几句话：
首先，construction worker你是指建筑工人吗，那车间工人你也管他叫construction worker吗，文章中没有明确提出我不觉得有什么问题
第二newcomer的意思我是知道的可能我打错了，但young只是说明年轻而已，要觉得有问题可以质疑
第三 guy是一定用于男生的，但是复数就不一样了，guys是指多个人的，里面可以包括女生的。
谢谢

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