he name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old.He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now.He have a pair of small eyes one small mothe.He is very mild.he favourite subject is chinese.He like play computer games and play the violin.Ili

he name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old.He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now.He have a pair of small eyes one small mothe.He is very mild.he favourite subject is chinese.He like play computer games and play the violin.Ili
he name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old.He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now.He have a pair of small eyes one small mothe.He is very mild.he favourite subject is chinese.He like play computer games and play the violin.Ilike him raeson is he study is very good,twant to leavn from him

he name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old.He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now.He have a pair of small eyes one small mothe.He is very mild.he favourite subject is chinese.He like play computer games and play the violin.Ili
he(His) name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old.He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now.He have(has) a pair of small eyes (+and)one(a) small mothe(拼写错误mouth).He is very mild.he(His) favourite subject is chinese(C大写).He like(likes) play(playing) computer games and play(playing) the violin.I like him raeson(because that) is(删除) he(his) study is very good,twant(and I want) to leavn(learn) from him
你要注意动词的变位,正确的文章是：
His name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old.He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now.He has a pair of small eyes and a small mouth.He is very mild.His favourite subject is Chinese.He likes playing computer games and playing the violin.I like him because that his study is very good,and I want to learn from him.

（His) name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old. He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now. He (has)a pair of small eyes (and)one small (mouth). He is very mild. (His) favourite sub...

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（His) name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old. He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now. He (has)a pair of small eyes (and)one small (mouth). He is very mild. (His) favourite subject is chinese.He like play computer games and play the violin. The reason I like him is (his) study is very good,I don't want to leave from him

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His name is Zha reng jie.He is twelve years old. He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now. He has a pair of small eyes and one small mothe. He is very mild. his favourite subject is ...

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His name is Zha reng jie.He is twelve years old. He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now. He has a pair of small eyes and one small mothe. He is very mild. his favourite subject is chinese.He likes playing computer games and the violin. I like him because his study is very good,I want to learn from him .
这是在不违背你的原意的情况下改的，不过说实话，这文写的太“中式”了。

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你好：
不是bron,是 born(出生）
第2行 不是He have 。是He has 。 "He has a pair of small eyes and a small mouth."
不是he favourite ，是his
He like play ，不对
应 在 like 后加s，应该是He likes playing computer game...

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你好：
不是bron,是 born(出生）
第2行 不是He have 。是He has 。 "He has a pair of small eyes and a small mouth."
不是he favourite ，是his
He like play ，不对
应 在 like 后加s，应该是He likes playing computer games and playing the violin.
"Ilike him raeson is he study is very good,twant to leavn from him "
纯属 中式英语！！是错误的。
应该 是 I like him the reason is he studies well.

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His（大些，物主代词）name is Zha Rengjie(大写).He is twelve years old. He was bron in Changzhou （地名大写）and he is living in Changzhou now. He has（第三人称单数） a pair of small eyes ，（分隔符）a（冠词） small mouth（嘴）. He is very...

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His（大些，物主代词）name is Zha Rengjie(大写).He is twelve years old. He was bron in Changzhou （地名大写）and he is living in Changzhou now. He has（第三人称单数） a pair of small eyes ，（分隔符）a（冠词） small mouth（嘴）. He is very mild. his（物主代词） favourite subject is Chinese（大写）.He likes（第三人称单数） playing（like后面加动名词）computer games and playing（同上） the violin. I like him for the raeson（原因是） is his（物主代词） study is very good,I want to learn（学习） from him

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1、第一句中的he改成his，应该用形容词形物主代词
2、第三句中的bron应该是born，应该是拼错了
3、he is living in changzhou now用一般现在时比较好。he lives in
changzhou now
4、第四第四句have改成has，用第三人称单数
5、眼睛用pair不合适，直接说small eyes就行了
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1、第一句中的he改成his，应该用形容词形物主代词
2、第三句中的bron应该是born，应该是拼错了
3、he is living in changzhou now用一般现在时比较好。he lives in
changzhou now
4、第四第四句have改成has，用第三人称单数
5、眼睛用pair不合适，直接说small eyes就行了
6、one small mothe改成a small mouth（one的用法不是很合适，mouth拼错了）
7、第六句把he改成his，用形容词性物主代词
8、第七句把like改成likes，用三单形式。把play改成playing，like+动词ing
9、最后一句......不说原因了，我认为应该这么说“I like him because he studies very hard,I want to learn from him （本人认为like用在这里不合适，不过语法没错误就是了）
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his name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old. He was born in changzhou and he lives in changzhou now. He has small eyes a small mouth. He is very mild. his favourite subject is chinese.He likes playing computer games and playing the violin. I like him because he studies very hard,I want to learn from him

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he (his)name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old. He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now. He have(has )a pair of small eyes(and) one small mothe. He is very mild. he favourite s...

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he (his)name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old. He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now. He have(has )a pair of small eyes(and) one small mothe. He is very mild. he favourite subject is (C要大写）chinese.He like（s） play（ing） computer games and play（ing） the violin. I like him raeson is（The reason i like him is that） he study is very good,twant to leavn from him

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