我的英语自我介绍,求英语大神修改下dear professors,it's a great honor to have the opportunity for the interview. first of all ,please let me introduce myself ,my name is xxx ,i come from xxx province, i graduated from wz medical colleg

我的英语自我介绍,求英语大神修改下dear professors,it's a great honor to have the opportunity for the interview. first of all ,please let me introduce myself ,my name is xxx ,i come from xxx province, i graduated from wz medical colleg
我的英语自我介绍,求英语大神修改下
dear professors,it's a great honor to have the opportunity for the interview. first of all ,please let me introduce myself ,my name is xxx ,i come from xxx province, i graduated from wz medical college , majoring in ophthalmology & optometry. my hobby is ti collect things, like coins, stamps and something made delicate.
i am a very esay-going and responsible boy since the enrollment, i have devoted myself to industrious study aiming to be a qualified doctor , in return , hard-working ended me to be interviewed here .meanwhile i have passed cet 6 ,what's more i also participated in the student union to make my college life more colorful.
during my inernship in affiliated hospital of zhejiang university ,i have learned how to use fundus pre-set lens and slit lamp ,and i've also served as the firt assistant in strabotomy . i know there is still a long way to go before i become a qualified ophthalmologist, that would be main reson why i am eager for further education . i want to enhance my research ability in ophthalmology ,especially in cataract ,so i sincerely hope professors can give me the opportunity to study in zhejiang university . i think postgraduate study can enrich my knwoledeg and establish a solid fundation for my further profession .
that is all about me ,thank you for giving me the opportunity for the interview ! thank you very much !
医学英语大神来！

我的英语自我介绍,求英语大神修改下dear professors,it's a great honor to have the opportunity for the interview. first of all ,please let me introduce myself ,my name is xxx ,i come from xxx province, i graduated from wz medical colleg
Respected professors,
It’s my great honor to have the opportunity for the interview.
First of all,please let me introduce myself.My name is xxx from xxx Province.I graduated from WZ Medical College,majoring in ophthalmology & optometry.My hobby is to collect things,such as coins,stamps and other things delicately-made.And I am a very easy-going and responsible boy by nature.
I have been devoting myself to professional study since enrollment,aiming at becoming a qualified doctor.My hard-working gets good pay in return,that’s why I’m here for the interview today.Meanwhile I have passed CET 6 and,as a member of the Student Union,I have been taking part in all activities of it for enrich my college life.
During my internship in the Affiliated Hospital of Zhejiang University,I have physically learned how to use fundus pre-set lens and slit lamp,and have served as the first assistant in some strabotomies.I know there is a long way to go before becoming a qualified ophthalmologist,that’s why I am eager for further education.I want to enhance my research ability in ophthalmology,especially in cataract.Therefore,respected sirs,I sincerely hope you will give me the opportunity to learn from you in Zhejiang University.I think postgraduate study will enrich my knowledge and broaden my vision,as well as lay a solid foundation for my future profession and career.
Thank you very much!Thank you all!
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