帮忙改一篇英语作文The Rank Of Human Being In Our SocietyIn our society,there's a rank between us.On the one side of the rank,is the rich.And the other side of the rank ,is the poor.There's hard to say what causes the question.In out country,

帮忙改一篇英语作文The Rank Of Human Being In Our SocietyIn our society,there's a rank between us.On the one side of the rank,is the rich.And the other side of the rank ,is the poor.There's hard to say what causes the question.In out country,
帮忙改一篇英语作文
The Rank Of Human Being In Our Society
In our society,there's a rank between us.On the one side of the rank,is the rich.And the other side of the rank ,is the poor.
There's hard to say what causes the question.In out country,farmers are despised by the people who live in cities.
Farmers signs dirty and poverty.But that's not an important reason.
In Chinese old opinion,the poor is in the low rank of our society.That's unfair.Fair,liberity,freedom are the spirts of a strong country.
However,there are a lot of normal people also live in the society.They lead a busy life but thet are happy.They make menoey hard.And the money for chilfdren's education,parents' medical treatment,and so on.
They are just like some bees,never feel busy.But they are really haapy persons.
We all know the opposite of POOR is RICH.
Our society ,however,the rich control it.In their eyes money is everything.A great man once said,money isn't everything.You can't buy your friendship with money,you can't vbuy your healthy body with your money,also,you can't buy happy with money.
Nowdays,many peolple kill themsleves.You may wonder why.They left words ,they felt bored,they didn't feel happy.
What I said means our society not balance.We nned a balance society to keep living.We should create a reall harmonious society and show the new China to the whole world.
可以适当得加一些比较高水准的长句啊~
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帮忙改一篇英语作文The Rank Of Human Being In Our SocietyIn our society,there's a rank between us.On the one side of the rank,is the rich.And the other side of the rank ,is the poor.There's hard to say what causes the question.In out country,
In our society,there's a rank between us.The one side of the rank,is the rich.And the other is the poor.
It's hard to say what causes the rank.
It can be a reason but not an important one that farmers,despised by the people who live in cities,sign dirty and poverty in some places in our country.
In Chinese old opinion,the poor is in the low rank of our society,which i think is unfair and yet equity,liberity,freedom are the spirts of a strong country.
However,there are a lot of normal people in the low rank also live in the society.They lead a their own life,just like some bees,feeling happy but never busy.They make money hard for chilfdren's education,parents' medical treatment,and so on.
We all know the opposite of POOR is RICH.
Our society ,however,is controled by the rich people whose eyes even contains by coins.A great man once said,money isn't everything.You can't buy your friendship with money,you can't buy your healthy with your money,also,you can't buy happiness with money.
Nowdays,many peolple with lots of money choose to kill themsleves.You may wonder why.They left words that though they wallow in money they could not feel warm and happy.
What I said means our society is not balanced.We need a balanced society to keep living.Thus,We should create a real harmonious society to help the poor and the farmers and show the new China to the whole world.
改了一些语法问题以及添加了一些帮助贯通句意的句子,还有就是用复合句缩写了一些我认为有些啰嗦的几组短句子 你看看成不成...

社会中的等级
我们生活在一个分等级阶层的社会。阶层的一端是富有者，另一端却是贫困的人。
想说明为何会出现这种现象是很困难的。在我们国家，城市里的人看不起农民。
农民就是肮脏和贫穷的代名词，但是这并不是主要原因。
在中国的传统观念里，穷人就应当处在社会的底层，这是不公正的。公平、解放和自由是一个富强国家的精神所在。
不过，还有许多的普通人也生活在这个社会中。他...

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社会中的等级
我们生活在一个分等级阶层的社会。阶层的一端是富有者，另一端却是贫困的人。
想说明为何会出现这种现象是很困难的。在我们国家，城市里的人看不起农民。
农民就是肮脏和贫穷的代名词，但是这并不是主要原因。
在中国的传统观念里，穷人就应当处在社会的底层，这是不公正的。公平、解放和自由是一个富强国家的精神所在。
不过，还有许多的普通人也生活在这个社会中。他们很忙碌但是也很快乐，他们辛苦地挣钱，以便能够教育孩子或者给父母进行医疗，等等。
他们就象蜜蜂一样不知疲倦，但是他们是真正快乐的人。
我们都知道，贫穷的对立面就是富有。
然而，我们的社会由富有者统治。在他们眼中，金钱就是一切。一位伟人曾经说过，金钱并不是一切。金钱买不到友谊、买不到健康，也买不到幸福。
今时今日，很多人选择自杀。或许，你会困惑这是为什么。他们的遗言是，他们疲倦了，他们感受不到幸福。
我所说的是，我们的社会是不平衡的。我们需要一个平衡的社会来继续生存。我们需要创造一个真正的和谐社会，并向全世界展现一个全新的中国。
不好意思，刚才发错了，把英文发上来了。

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