帮忙看一下这一篇英语演讲稿主要是讲感谢母亲的,一分钟Hello!Pleased tosee you all here.I will give a talk about thanksgiving then.Students,do youknow where do we come from?Our mothers give us lives!It means that our mothers’bl

帮忙看一下这一篇英语演讲稿主要是讲感谢母亲的,一分钟Hello!Pleased tosee you all here.I will give a talk about thanksgiving then.Students,do youknow where do we come from?Our mothers give us lives!It means that our mothers’bl
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主要是讲感谢母亲的,一分钟
Hello!Pleased tosee you all here.I will give a talk about thanksgiving then.Students,do youknow where do we come from?Our mothers give us lives!It means that our mothers’blood is flowing in our bodies now.So,I think everybody who even a leader
should say thanks to their mothers.Mothers let us enjoy our childhood.They
feed us to eat,send us to school for studying and protect us everywhere.They
also help us after we become adults.At that time,they ring us up often
because they want to know more about how we live.Although we go away from
them,we should take more care of them.A song says that wherever you are,you
cannot forget your mother.My mother is the most beautiful women I ever saw.
Let us love them forever.Thank you!
Hello!Pleased to
see you all here.I will give a talk about thanksgiving then.Students,do you
know where do we come from?Our mothers give us lives!It means that our mothers’
blood is flowing in our bodies now.So,I think everybody who even a leader
should say thanks to their mothers.Mothers let us enjoy our childhood.They
feed us to eat,send us to school for studying and protect us everywhere.They
also help us after we become adults.At that time,they ring us up often
because they want to know more about how we live.Although we go away from
them,we should take more care of them.A song says that wherever you are,you
cannot forget your mother.My mother is the most beautiful women I ever saw.Let us love them forever.Thank you!

帮忙看一下这一篇英语演讲稿主要是讲感谢母亲的,一分钟Hello!Pleased tosee you all here.I will give a talk about thanksgiving then.Students,do youknow where do we come from?Our mothers give us lives!It means that our mothers’bl
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演讲：speech,一般不用talk;
students做称呼听起来别扭.everybody, 或 dear classmates 要自然些.

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Hello! Pleased to see you all here. [I will -> I’m glad to have
this opportunity to] give [you]
a talk about thanksgiving (then). [Students -> My fellow students], do you know where (d...

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建议：
Hello! Pleased to see you all here. [I will -> I’m glad to have
this opportunity to] give [you]
a talk about thanksgiving (then). [Students -> My fellow students], do you know where (do) we [come -> came] from? Our mothers [give -> gave] us lives! It means that our mothers’ blood is flowing in our bodies now. So, I think everybody, (who) even a leader, should say thanks to their mothers.
Mothers let us enjoy our childhood. They feed us (to eat), send us to school (for studying) and protect us everywhere. They also help us after we become adults. (At that time,) they ring us up often because they want to know more about how we live.
Although we [go -> are] away from them, we should take (more) care of them. A song says that wherever you are, you cannot forget your mother. My mother is the most
beautiful women I ever saw. Let us love them forever. Thank you!
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我帮你全部修改一下，改完是这样的：Hello!Everyone! Pleased to see you all here. I'm going to give a talk about thanksgiving then. Firstly,I would like to ask you a question: do you know how we can come to this world? O...

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我帮你全部修改一下，改完是这样的：Hello!Everyone! Pleased to see you all here. I'm going to give a talk about thanksgiving then. Firstly,I would like to ask you a question: do you know how we can come to this world? Our mothers give us lives! She brought us into this wonderful world！I think that no matter who you are or what job you're working,you all
should say thanks to your mothers. Mothers accompany us in our childhood. They
feed us when we need food, send us to school everyday and make an effort to protect us . They
also help us even we become adults. At that time, they often want to call us
because they want to know whether we're living a happy lives or not . Although we don't live with
them, we still should take good care of them. There is a song says that wherever you are, you
cannot forget your mother. My mother is the most beautiful women in our eyes,ever!
Please love them and always be grateful for them. Thank you for your attention!
希望能帮助到你。

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