自己写了个小短文,错误多多,并指出错误的原因,为何错了,a bored neighborThere was a bored old man who was a bored and crazy people in my district.My home was at No.18 and he was at No.22 beside my home.perhaps you'll ask me this r

自己写了个小短文,错误多多,并指出错误的原因,为何错了,a bored neighborThere was a bored old man who was a bored and crazy people in my district.My home was at No.18 and he was at No.22 beside my home.perhaps you'll ask me this r
自己写了个小短文,错误多多,并指出错误的原因,为何错了,
a bored neighbor
There was a bored old man who was a bored and crazy people in my district.My home was at No.18 and he was at No.22 beside my
home.perhaps you'll ask me this reason why I call him a bored neighbor.In fact,He have become a crazy people.
When we all have already go into dream,This old man standed alone on his veranda after 24:00.After The man began call loudly!
Because he have some accent,I can't understand all of his words.but I can understand he was scolding country,Communist
Party,community ,etc...The man called 1 hour al least every night...The man have already called for three months...
Perhaps community was not justness to him and he can have a lot of complaint.But he shoundn't effect our rest.he shouldn't only
thought his feel himself.
But we have no idea.Because he could be a crazy people...
I wish Who could send him to go to the madhouse...

自己写了个小短文,错误多多,并指出错误的原因,为何错了,a bored neighborThere was a bored old man who was a bored and crazy people in my district.My home was at No.18 and he was at No.22 beside my home.perhaps you'll ask me this r
你写得不错.我帮你修改了些英文习惯的用法.如果你能自己比较一下或是找出不同的地方,那样你的英文就会进步更大.希望下次能写些正面的文章.写些好人的故事.你这个故事给我来写,我可能会写成"一个无助的人"想想那老人内心的伤痛,无奈,无助,他为啥半夜大叫呢.一定是悲伤到了极点,真想伸出双手去帮助他."你换个角度来写,文章会很感人.多几分同情,少几分愤恨.你会是个快乐人.
祝好!
A nuisance
There is a nuisance in my neighborhood. He is an old man whose house is right next to mine. My house is at No.18 and his is at No.22.
. Perhaps you'll ask why I call him a nuisance neighbor. Ok, let me tell you why. Every night when everybody is sound asleep, this old man will stand alone on his veranda after two am.,. Calling loudly!
He has some accents. I don’t quite understand what he says... but I can understand he was cursing our country as well as our Communist party.
Party, community, etc... The man shouted at least one hour every night... He has been acting like this for three months...
Perhaps the government has done something unfair to him. He can have a lot of complaint. But he shouldn’t bother other people when they have a nice rest... He shouldn’t just think about his own feelings.
But we have no idea what to do with him since he is a crazy person.
I really wish he could be sent to an asylum.

a bored(crazy) neighbor
There was a bored old man who was(is) a bored and crazy people(person) in my district. My home was at(去掉) No.18 and he(his) was at(去掉) No.22 beside my
home. perhaps y...

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a bored(crazy) neighbor
There was a bored old man who was(is) a bored and crazy people(person) in my district. My home was at(去掉) No.18 and he(his) was at(去掉) No.22 beside my
home. perhaps you'll ask me this（the） reason why I call him a bored neighbor. In fact, He have become a crazy people(person).
(这句话跟上文的逻辑有问题，建议改成In fact, he is not only boring but a crazy person.)
When we all have already go into dream(when we have already fell asleep), This old man standed alone on his veranda after 24:00. After(later) The man began (to)call loudly!
Because he have some accent, I can't understand all of his words. but I can understand he was scolding country(the society他骂的是社会吧),(the)Communist
Party,community , etc... The man called at least(提前) 1 hour (nearly)every night... The man have already called for three months...
Perhaps community was not justness（justice公平） to him and he can（去掉） have(has) a lot of complaint(这是形容词，名词用complain).But he shoundn't effect(bother) our rest.he shouldn't only
thought(of) his (own)feel (feeling)himself(去掉).
But we have no idea.Because he could be a crazy people(person)...
I wish I could send him to (go to去掉) the madhouse...

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第一行不能是a bored and crazy people，people表示一个群体，最好用man.第一行home改为house，home是抽象名词。
There was a bored old man who was a bored and crazy man in my district. My house was No.18 and his was a No.22 which i...

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第一行不能是a bored and crazy people，people表示一个群体，最好用man.第一行home改为house，home是抽象名词。
There was a bored old man who was a bored and crazy man in my district. My house was No.18 and his was a No.22 which is beside my house。
第二句这样好一些Parhaps you want to ask me the reason why I call him a bored neighbor.第三句have改has，people也要改，people是复数，不能用a。第三句have后用gone。Because he have some accent中he是单数，have-〉has。
but I can understand he was scolding country,Communist
al least 放在1 hour前或every evenig后。
Party,community , etc... 这句改为but I know that he was scolding the country,the Communist
Party,the community and so on。注意名词前一般要有冠词。
Perhaps community was not justness to him and he can have a lot of complaint这一句justness是名词，不能做was的表语，改为just，还有community前加the，并且把can去掉，have改为had。
he shouldn't only thought his feel himself. 改为
he shouldn't only thought about his feeling himself.
最后俩句Because he could be a crazy people...
I wish Who could send him to go to the madhouse...改为
Because he is a crazy man...
I wish someone could send him to the bedlam.

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前面的“There was a bored old man who was a bored and crazy people in my district. ”你后面已经用who was a bored ……来修饰这个老爷爷，那前面就不用“bored ”这个词，会显得很多余
还有When we all have already go into dream，“go”应改为“gone”

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前面的“There was a bored old man who was a bored and crazy people in my district. ”你后面已经用who was a bored ……来修饰这个老爷爷，那前面就不用“bored ”这个词，会显得很多余
还有When we all have already go into dream，“go”应改为“gone”
“24:00”你有没有学过，是不可以这样表示的，要写成“00：00”或用英文表示“12 pm”
After The man began call loudly! 改“Afer that……”你是想说“之后”吧，Afer that是固定搭配。你也可以理解为that是代词，表示你前面说的那件事。
Because he have some accent，“have”-“had”或者用“has”你用的是过去式，“has”是表示他一般都是这样，一般时，时态要一致。
he shouldn't only thought his feel himself.其实这里可以用“ only thought himself”读起来没有这么绕口，简便一点，也顺一点，让人看起来没有这么复杂。
其实英语作文没有这么难写，我有一个想法就是，你应该写多一点，the bored man影响你们，你们有什么不好的影响啊，之类的，才能突出他的bored & cracy 不要一直说他，也要说说自己。
以上是我这个小妹妹的建议 Crystal+○ 我是初二学生，我有空的时候也很喜欢写一些英语作文去投稿哦，QQ：417185357 欢迎你一起和我研究一下英语作文和语法

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thought his feel himself.
But we have no idea.Because he could be a crazy people

a bored* neighbor 要用-boring.你们老师肯定是讲，修饰人时用bored,修饰物用boring.不要照搬啊。bored是针对人的感受，就是说感觉厌烦的那一方做主语时才用bored.如果是使别人感到厌烦的不管是人还是物作句子主语，都用boring.eg: it's a boring story.
I left the house, bored.

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a bored* neighbor 要用-boring.你们老师肯定是讲，修饰人时用bored,修饰物用boring.不要照搬啊。bored是针对人的感受，就是说感觉厌烦的那一方做主语时才用bored.如果是使别人感到厌烦的不管是人还是物作句子主语，都用boring.eg: it's a boring story.
I left the house, bored.
（以下相同错误不再重述）
啊哦~~问题实在太多了，几乎每一句都要改。呵呵，我给你重写一篇，尽量尊重原创的结构，你自己对比一下吧。逐个解释的话工作量太大了。
In the same district with me there is an old man, a boring neighbour, who lives in No 22 just next to my house. You may have the question- why I call him a boring neighbour? Please just read on.
He is really boring, acctually, he has gone mad. Late in the night,when everyone goes to sleep, the old man begin to shout loudly standing alone in the veranda and all of us can hear his fearful sad voice. I can understand just a part of his words, it seems that he is not satisfied with the country and the party and he complains a lot on his having been treated unequally.He has been acting this way for three months and every night the shouting would last for at least one hour long.

Perhaps it is true that he hadn't been treated well enough and I do have compassion on him. But, is it reasonable for him to do this? Of course not! he should think more for other people, for his neighbours.
We are disturbed but we could do nothing since he is such a mad people.I hope someone in charge of this would send him to psychiatric hospital where he could be taken good care of and give us quiet life.
建议，你需要好好学习语法，问题不小哦。
不过你会自觉写英语作文，这是非常好的，多写多练势必会有帮助。另外，最好多读一些比较规范的英语文章，学生用的教材是最好的，学习怎样用英语组织句子。

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