帮我修改和丰富我的英语Daily report演讲稿我写了大概,不过里面错误应该挺多的,而且太短,帮我改改错再增加点内容,能说15分钟以上.我写的report是下面第一个人回答的文章,唉...字数太多不让

帮我修改和丰富我的英语Daily report演讲稿我写了大概,不过里面错误应该挺多的,而且太短,帮我改改错再增加点内容,能说15分钟以上.我写的report是下面第一个人回答的文章,唉...字数太多不让
帮我修改和丰富我的英语Daily report演讲稿
我写了大概,不过里面错误应该挺多的,而且太短,帮我改改错再增加点内容,能说15分钟以上.
我写的report是下面第一个人回答的文章,唉...字数太多不让贴在问题上!
字数太多不让贴啊....我换个号回复贴也没出来啊，怎么办呢？
额...我贴在我的QQ空间里了...orz,先用这法子吧...我想到好办法再来弄一下...
我在纳米盘上弄了个下载文件...可以下载...
http://www.namipan.com/d/%e8%a6%81%e4%bf%ae%e6%94%b9%e7%9a%84Daily%20report.txt/cc2a04c9aea304441eaf47dd90927d117a34c764020d0000

帮我修改和丰富我的英语Daily report演讲稿我写了大概,不过里面错误应该挺多的,而且太短,帮我改改错再增加点内容,能说15分钟以上.我写的report是下面第一个人回答的文章,唉...字数太多不让
不是Newton Theorem,是Newton's Law
Maybe you will think 把think改成doubt
common不是comman!
而且建议你把they have no comman改成they might seem to have little in common这样比较正宗
homosexal也拼错了（罪孽啊~）是homosexual
What percentage of people now are homosexal?有语法问题,是What is the percentage of people that are now being homosexual?
The average ratio from several studies are that 9.56% of men are homosexual and 4.75% of women are homosexual改成
The average ratios from several studies indicate(show) that 9.56% of male are homosexual while only 4.75% of women do the same(are homosexual)
下一句的So 改成that is to say
中间还有一段很乱,可改成
.Today's China is traditional social or family-based.The unfilial actions including issues about dying without children so that nobody would inherit status,family names are the most serious matter.
Homosexuality with no birth,of course,can not be accepted.But a woman,a social docter named 李银河 in 2003 gave the suggestion about the Legalization of Homosexual Marriage to the National People's Congress (NPC全国人民代表大会)
虽然Not homosexuality and birth这句我还是不太明白这句话的意思,只好改成同位语形式,你看要是意思不对就算了
Ar last I want to say that It is difficult to have a reasonable discussion of homosexuality because of all the rhetoric in our times coloring and disguising the issues.but now still have some one stand out and let public face up to the problem about homosexal
这两句很混乱,第一句意思不对劲,我觉得你可能想写every coins has two sides,it's hard to come to a reasonable result.
第二句没主语,还有些拼错了的的地方
Now today I chose this topic just want you can know more about homosexal ,won’t discriminate them and try to understand them .Because God loves everyone!这句也不对,Now和 today重复了won’t应 改成don't

文章在哪里？

我帮你改好了，直接回复在你qq上面了，你可以看下，呵呵~