请英文高手帮忙修改英文稿,特别是语法My name is Tao hengmei.I come from tianchang city of Anhui province.Now I live at Anting town of Jiading borough..My age is 27 .I have eight years of work experience ,including 3 years for plan and

请英文高手帮忙修改英文稿,特别是语法My name is Tao hengmei.I come from tianchang city of Anhui province.Now I live at Anting town of Jiading borough..My age is 27 .I have eight years of work experience ,including 3 years for plan and
请英文高手帮忙修改英文稿,特别是语法
My name is Tao hengmei.I come from tianchang city of Anhui province.Now I live at Anting town of Jiading borough..My age is 27 .I have eight years of work experience ,including 3 years for plan and 5 years for purchasing.
From September 1996 to July 1999,I studied at Anhui Huainan economy technology school.I major in electromechanical integration.This is a secondary technical school.After graduation ,from August 1999 to August 2002,I worked in Yuanxin electromechanical unshan)company,the job is a planner.From August 2002 to August 2004,I worked in Gaofeng industry (kunshan)company,the job is a purchaser.From September 2004 to September 2006,I worked in Shanghai liaisicmemotori company.The job is a purchaser.From September 2006 to February 2008,I worked in Shanghai anderson Greenwood Crosby valves company,the job was a purchasing engineer ,and was the principal of out-manufacture project.
All of the work included Supplier development and buy.
Last,I think I am a responsible perpon.
the principal of out-manufacture project
我想表达的是：我是外协（外部协作）方面的负责人

请英文高手帮忙修改英文稿,特别是语法My name is Tao hengmei.I come from tianchang city of Anhui province.Now I live at Anting town of Jiading borough..My age is 27 .I have eight years of work experience ,including 3 years for plan and
去掉括号里的,加上大写的.
My name is Tao hengmei.I (come)AM from tianchang city of Anhui province.Now I live at Anting town of Jiading (borough.).(My age is 27)I'M 27 YEARS OLD,(.I have)WITH eight years of workING experience ,including 3 years (for)OF planNING and 5 years (for)OF purchasing.
From September 1996 to July 1999,I studied at Anhui Huainan economy technology school(.I )majorING in electromechanical integration.This is a secondary technical school.After graduation ,from August 1999 to August 2002,I worked in Yuanxin electromechanical unshan)?company,(the job is)AS a planner(WHAT PLANNER?).From August 2002 to August 2004,I worked in Gaofeng industry (kunshan)company,(the job is)AS a (purchaser)BUYER.From September 2004 to September 2006,I worked in Shanghai liaisicmemotori company(.The job is)AS a (purchaser)BUYER.From September 2006 to February 2008,I worked in Shanghai anderson Greenwood Crosby valves company,(the job was)AS a purchasing engineer ,and was the (principal)HEAD?of out-manufacture(?WHAT'S THAT?YOU MEAN OUTSOURCING?) project.
All (of the work included)ABOVE ARE IN THE AREA OF PROCUREMENT(,WHICH INCLUDES Supplier development and buy.)
(Last)MOREOVER,I (think)BELIEVE I am a responsible (perpon)PERSON.
外部协作负责人?负责什么项目?通常这个职位是叫 co-ordinator .

Hello everyone.
My name is Tao hengmei.
My hometown is Tianchang, Anhui Province.
Now I live in Anting of Jiading borough.
I am 27 years old.
I have eight years of working experi...

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Hello everyone.
My name is Tao hengmei.
My hometown is Tianchang, Anhui Province.
Now I live in Anting of Jiading borough.
I am 27 years old.
I have eight years of working experience including 3 years for plan and 5 years for purchasing.
I graduated from Anhui Huainan Economic & Technology College in the year 1999.
And my major is Electromechanical integration. Then I worked in Yuanxin Electromechanical Kunshan Company, and worked as a planner.
In the year 2002, I changed my job and worked in Gaofeng Industry (Kunshan) Company, and serve as a purchaser.
Then in 2004 I moved to Shanghai and worked in Shanghai Liaisicmemotori Company and worked as a purchaser.
From 2006 to 2008, I worked in Shanghai Anderson Greenwood Crosby Valves Company, and worked as Purchasing Engineer,and was the principal of out-manufacture project.
All of the works included Supplier development and purchase.
Last but not the least, I think I am a responsible person.
你这面试结尾不行啊

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个人感觉说：I have working experience of 8 years 比较好。
major 改为 majored 好一点
the job is a planner 前加上连接词and， is改为was
下文的I worked in Gaofeng industry (kunshan)company, the job is a planner可以改为I wor...

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个人感觉说：I have working experience of 8 years 比较好。
major 改为 majored 好一点
the job is a planner 前加上连接词and， is改为was
下文的I worked in Gaofeng industry (kunshan)company, the job is a planner可以改为I worked as a purchaser in Gaofeng Industry Company.
From September 2004 to September 2006, I worked in Shanghai liaisicmemotori company. The job is a purchaser.改为I gained a work as purchaser in Shanghai ...
All of the work included Supplier development and buy. 改为my work is to develop suppliers and purchase.
Last, I think I am a responsible perpon.改为： In brief, I am a responsible person.
你自己再仔细看下，有的修改并不一定合适。~·~

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