帮我看看这篇英语文章有什么问题,快Dear Liu Yun,Hi!I am Xu Xinyi.Anne is my english name.I am happy to have a new pen pal.I live in Ningbo with my mom and dad,Ningbo is a beautiful city.Welcome to Ningbo!I don't have a sister or brother

帮我看看这篇英语文章有什么问题,快Dear Liu Yun,Hi!I am Xu Xinyi.Anne is my english name.I am happy to have a new pen pal.I live in Ningbo with my mom and dad,Ningbo is a beautiful city.Welcome to Ningbo!I don't have a sister or brother
帮我看看这篇英语文章有什么问题,快
Dear Liu Yun,
Hi!I am Xu Xinyi.Anne is my english name.I am happy to have a new pen pal.I live in Ningbo with my mom and dad,Ningbo is a beautiful city.Welcome to Ningbo!I don't have a sister or brother,but I hope to have one.I have a small family,but it is coziness.There are three people in my family--father,mother and me.My mother is a teacher.She works in school.She is slightly fat,but she is very optimistic.She often say:"laugh and be fat."She likes listening to music.And my father is a boss.He is very tall and thin.I love my father,because I take after one's father.He likes basketball very much,he is a loyal fans.I like riding my bike and drewing pictures.What about you?
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帮我看看这篇英语文章有什么问题,快Dear Liu Yun,Hi!I am Xu Xinyi.Anne is my english name.I am happy to have a new pen pal.I live in Ningbo with my mom and dad,Ningbo is a beautiful city.Welcome to Ningbo!I don't have a sister or brother
Dear Liu Yun,
Hi!I am Xu Xinyi.My English name is Anne.I am glad to have a new pen pal.I live in Ningbo which is a beautiful city and welcome to Ningbo!I have no sister or brother though I hope so.My family is small but cozy.There are three people in my family--father,mother and me.My mother is a teacher.She is a little fat,but she is very optimistic.She often says:"laugh and be fat."She likes listening to music.And my father is a business manager.He is very tall and thin.I love my father,because I take after him.He likes basketball very much,and he is a loyal fans.I like riding my bike and drewing pictures.How about you?